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Saxophone smooth in a three-piece suit
enters Blue - cool and suave, disdainful
to those of duller class - the crass
beiges and browns seen down the street
and around the town.

Electric, Blue glides bar-ward, in charge
and smug with martini charm - rhythmic
in conversation, his words slide
like the saxophone ride he came in on.
Red can't leave him alone.

He presses convivial keys, playing
the spectrum with a smug smile -
It's an old game with new names
and people to mix with. He smirks
his way to Ebony.

'How have you been?' and all that jazz,
just the casual quips and usual digs
of the typically hip, tripping
over tongues and each others' ego.
'Hey, gotta run'

Over to Green, and the game is on:
Name drops, topic-hops, the usual
shoptalk of performers at play -
Plucked strings sing a telling tune.
Green leaves with Envy.

Saxophone smooth in his three-piece suit,
Blue waves like the pacific ocean, breaks
the last ice and serenades the senses
with a warm smile directed at the party.
He leaves the bar with Red.
Inspired by the Forum contest at [link]

To paraphrase the details:
There is a party!
Only, the attendees of this party aren't ordinary people - they're colors.
The idea is, using poetry or prose, to characterise a colour and their behaviour at the party, and their interactions with others.


I chose to do this with poetry.

It was time to take a break from metric verse - so I have gone back to freeverse with this one.

I am fairly happy with how it has turned out.

Benedictions!
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myloveliestsequence Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2006
two thumbs up to the south of the world !
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ArchAngel3989 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
Bella Bella
I really love the contrast, its seriously an amazing work of art
Pleas drop in and let me know what you think of "Alone and Lost"
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darkcrescendo Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
I am glad you enjoyed it.

Unfortunately, having no home internet currently, I don't have much time to write critiques. If you note me at a later stage I can see what I can do :)

Benedictions!
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ArchAngel3989 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you
by the way i love the quote
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Aladdin-Sane Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2005
Just putting together a list of my favourite dA poems, and I had to add this.

Whenever I set down to write I always think back to the opening line of this piece: it's probably the most perfect opener I've ever seen.
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darkcrescendo Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you like it :)

Benedictions!
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PrestonMeyers Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2005
fantastic. i like the rhythm of this "Blue" character. it's like the James Bond of the bar scene!

great descriptions and imagery and "all that jazz."

hope you don't mind if i :+fav: and :+devwatch:
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darkcrescendo Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I'm personally quite happy with how this poem turned out. :)
It did everything I wanted it to upon completion.

Benedictions!
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TheCuddlyDevil Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2004
I remember reading this before, but I was unfamiliar with a few words so I left it alone. I glanced the topic just now and thought I'd give it another read.

Really, this is really nice, kind of humorous and cute in its own way, this would do really well in spoken, hope another spoken word contest is around the corner, I'll want to do this one, if ya don't mind.
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darkcrescendo Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
No worries at all - feel free to do so!

I am glad you enjoyed it.

Benedictions!
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