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We shared a cup of tea, she and I.
No milk, no sugar,
no honeycoated words to weaken the taste of departure.
We were connoisseurs, and well acquainted
with the many blends of coming change.
Understanding kept us mute, our ceremony quiet
as we stirred the aging, aromatic leaves.

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We drank darjeeling once,
when the grass was frost-glamourous
and our eyes danced a dawn tango.
She wore red; I read her Blake's secret;
and we smiled over brimming cups.

'Your eyes are earl grey' I whispered,
when a mountain's shadow embraced us
and day turned into dusk into her eyes
as rain waltzed all around, enchanting,
to the scattered orchestra of rustling leaves.
We danced then, she and I.

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I share some cooling tea with her memory.
No milk, no sugar,
no passing of the spoon in ritual comfort.
I am a connoisseur, and well acquainted
with the aching thoughts found in an empty cup.
©2005-2009 `darkcrescendo
:icondarkcrescendo:

Author's Comments

Freeverse.
More play with a relaxed voice.

~moyan was kind enough to choose this work as part of her 'Project Resonance' endeavour.
The corresponding artwork may be found through this [link]

Benedictions.

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:icongunshymartyr:
Forgive me, I find it very difficult to critique poetry lately.

I read it three times.

The first was like deeply inhaling the scent of a long forgotten memory. It made me smile, if a bit sadly.

The second time I looked carefully, and found joy I had not previous seen in what created the pleasant smells.

The third time I drank deeply, felt warm and satisfied. Yet there was a little left at the bottom of the cup, and I wonder what made it so that I could not take that in as well.

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It's been a while since I've enjoyed a poem on dA in this way. Thank you.

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:iconlucheiah:
It's very nice - gentle and light on the surface, but rich and deep at the core. I love it!

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:iconsanguru:
the words to me seem ancient, as if from another time. perhaps that is the best way i can explain it. in reading this, i had one of those old poetry readers, lulling over every syllable in my head, smoothing everything line together in sweet perfection.

this poem is beautiful. something straight out of my heart on paper, only the words are yours. and that, is amazing.
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:iconsoul-lozenge:
Wow, I really like this! Let me see what I can say about it . . . the tea is a very nice, comfortable and comforting metaphor for changes in life and relationships. You convey the feelings of love, happiness, sadness, etc very well. I'm going to have to fave this, and you should know that I don't fave poetry very often. :)

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:iconphantasmacy:
this poem is very warming..i like it a lot ;) :+fav:

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:iconsirensong135:
:heart:

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"In a coma you don't dream, you just hope that someone sits with you."

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:iconrebeccaa:
Well done. It brought to mind old manor houses, more formal dress and an age more genteel. The imagery is quite good switching between metaphor and the physical. I feel that this is definitely one of your better ones.
:iconrogyn:
Perfection.

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:iconwydan13:
As one who just lost a relationship, I must say your words are beautiful. Bravo.
:iconla-serpentia:
jamesy, i have no critical comments to offer yet, other than that the title is appalling and boring and lazy.

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All the artists flew in and all the arseholes flew out in '72



<`MinorKey> and don't drink so much that you remember having fun...

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